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Post 13: Sound

 Script


The start of the film will be here, I wont be using the diegetic sound of the area because the wind was extremely loud on practice recording every time
so instead ill use mild white noise.

The heart beat will be a sound i use of YouTube link attached:



  • Fades in from black

    Samuel walks into the train station, on his phone texting his friends, suddenly he receives a text that seems to put a serious expression on his face. He walks over to the benches to take a seat and wait for his train.

    He walks onto his train, taking a seat on a table seating area on the right hand corner of the carriage against the window, filmed using a  long cut following him from behind onto his seat stopping where the table starts.

    He puts his headphones on, and it fills the outside sound.

    Inner monologue begins

    “I can’t believe I’ve got myself into this.” Said Samuel in a disappointed and worried tone.

    “I just need to get this over with and then I can be done with it. I can’t let anyone know what I’m doing because I know they wouldn’t see it in the same way I do, as a matter of fact I don’t even know how I see it” He said, obviously upset with himself but trying to convince himself he’s doing the ok thing.

    “If my mum found out I was even involved in drugs she would never forgive me, I just need money right now though I need to get a car soon that way she wont have to worry about me buying one or even giving me any money towards it. She doesn’t even need to know…” He said starting to overthink, gradually becoming a louder in his own head.

    “She wouldn’t forgive me” X 5/6

    The camera slowly coming closer towards him, switching to black and then getting closer, repeating that 5/6 times. Each time the screen goes black you hear Samuel say “She wouldn’t forgive me” slowly getting louder and more anxious sounding each time.

    The final fade to black fades back into a flash back of his mother, crying on the sofa, crying in his room after finding drugs. You hear a faded version of Samuels voice crying and apologizing and trying to justify himself however before you can see his mother’s reaction fully the screen fades back out to Samuels face scrunched out of anxiety and paranoia.

    He looks at the family to his right on the train, he has a flash forward to what he thinks he could be outing in harms way by carrying on the cycle of him dealing drugs and becoming the very thing he fears.

    “I don’t want to hurt anyone.”

    “I don’t know how to get out of this, if I don’t turn up he might hurt me, or even my family…” he said sounding extremely concerned.

    A heart beat begins

    Lots of voices talking over each other with repeating words like “Money” “Success” “The car”

    He starts to realise once again why he’s doing this.

    “She won’t find out, I just need to do this for her sake. She’s the only one I have and I cant keep taking from her” he says trying to reassure himself about his entire idea to buy and sell the drugs.

    He sits staring out the window, trying to relax himself, the heart beat slows and the train announces that its now arriving to its destination. He gets up to go to the door.

    “Can I do this?” he asks himself.

    The camera is placed behind him and follows him off the train slowly getting lower then pointing at the floor and then fading to black leaving the audience on a cliff hanger.

    Fin.

     

     

     

     

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